You ever just lay in bed and stare at the ceiling all night?
Maybe you could have him like looking at a picture of melanie instead of him talking to himself. Use the visual medium. Show dont tell.
Maybe you could have him like looking at a picture of melanie instead of him talking to himself. Use the visual medium. Show dont tell.
Maybe you could have him like looking at a picture of melanie instead of him talking to himself. Use the visual medium. Show dont tell.
Maybe you could have him like looking at a picture of melanie instead of him talking to himself. Use the visual medium. Show dont tell.
:^y That actually happens on the next page (pages 1-4 of chapter 8 have been available for patrons for the past couple weeks), but the thing is I don't expect readers to remember the name of Lionel's long-time ex-girlfriend because she's only been mentioned previously and never actually made an appearance.
Also, Lionel isn't actually talking to himself. You'll see in later pages, thank you for reading!
>one line of dialogue for the first time in several panels across two pages, most of which were establishing shots and other quiet panels to show the passage of time
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